hi I really enjoyed your story except on the first line you need to check it because it says ”on day”, it dosent really make much sense. Also I really liked that ending when you put ” do you think they will fall in love?” its a really good ristorical question.
hi I really enjoyed your story especially at the end when you put a historical question I think it makes the reader want to read it more because it worked for me. Also in the first line I think you need to check it again because you put on day Ithat dosent really make sense I think you should of put one day. But other than that tiny mistake your work its fantastic well done
I like that u put ready for the day a head ceap up the good work:] chelsea
Good job sis.
What will happen next.Julia I have enjoyed reading your story and you could add some more punctuation to make it more interesting. Maisha
hi I really enjoyed your story except on the first line you need to check it because it says ”on day”, it dosent really make much sense. Also I really liked that ending when you put ” do you think they will fall in love?” its a really good ristorical question.
well done!
hi I really enjoyed your story especially at the end when you put a historical question I think it makes the reader want to read it more because it worked for me. Also in the first line I think you need to check it again because you put on day Ithat dosent really make sense I think you should of put one day. But other than that tiny mistake your work its fantastic well done