You maybe want to add what is the robber’s name and you maybe should put some one gives you a magic drink for Chop and its £3067? You ask me, I don’t know.
You maybe want to add what is the robbers name and you maybe should put some one gives you a magic drink for Chop
and its £3067? you ask me i don’t know.
wow,
that’s sad for the bull dog,
maybe if your next story is part of this,
you could write he got a new bull dog!
This is quite an interesting story.
James Gearies primary School
year 5
Has your robber ever been caught at least once? I like your story. It is very interesting. You have some spelling mistakes like doesn’t should be spelt doesn’t.
Your work is very interesting. Has your robber ever been caught by the police? Has he been blackmailed? You accidently spelt doesn’t wrong. Next time learn your spellings but anyway I liked your work.
Wow Logan that was a awesome part of a story I think you don’t need to improve anything.The thing that I like the best was when you told us about yourself.
You maybe want to add what is the robber’s name and you maybe should put some one gives you a magic drink for Chop and its £3067? You ask me, I don’t know.
Ruby E
You maybe want to add what is the robbers name and you maybe should put some one gives you a magic drink for Chop
and its £3067? you ask me i don’t know.
Ruby E
This robber sounds like a mean character- does he have any redeeming features, anything nice about his personality? Mrs Coop
wow,
that’s sad for the bull dog,
maybe if your next story is part of this,
you could write he got a new bull dog!
This is quite an interesting story.
James Gearies primary School
year 5
Has your robber ever been caught at least once? I like your story. It is very interesting. You have some spelling mistakes like doesn’t should be spelt doesn’t.
Hi Logan!
What a good story and you have used the title money on my mind
sounding like Sam Smiths song
next time use a bit more Adjectives
By Sadia
Gearies Primary School
Y5
Your work is very interesting. Has your robber ever been caught by the police? Has he been blackmailed? You accidently spelt doesn’t wrong. Next time learn your spellings but anyway I liked your work.
That is a really tense ending. You could probably explain how the dog looks like.
Abhinav
I like how it ended in a mystery is he lives or not
Shuhana
Gearies primary school
Wow Logan that was a awesome part of a story I think you don’t need to improve anything.The thing that I like the best was when you told us about yourself.
I like your story because its all about money!
By Nelson