You spelt metallic wrong just saying to help 🙂
Your description was really good because you’ve added lots of describing words.You should add capital letters when your only putting I on its own. By Maisha
Very good punctuation also I think you should of used more verbs by Richard
Emma this is a really good piece of literature and has a good vocabulary also you could improve on the use of the same words. By Yumna
Lovely descriptive piece! I like all the ellipsis. Try to use more connectives! Keep writing! Mrs Wells
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You spelt metallic wrong just saying to help 🙂
Your description was really good because you’ve added lots of describing words.You should add capital letters when your only putting I on its own. By Maisha
Very good punctuation also I think you should of used more verbs by Richard
Emma this is a really good piece of literature and has a good vocabulary also you could improve on the use of the same words.
By Yumna
Lovely descriptive piece! I like all the ellipsis. Try to use more connectives! Keep writing! Mrs Wells