Make sure you proof read your writing as you have not used enough punctuation Kalie! What other punctuation could you have used here as well as full stops? Mr. Berry
The first sentence is very long maybe you could have shortened it a little bit.
This needs full stops. Charlie K
I like it but what would you use as defence? Sally Kerr
I would use a dagger or a sword or any weapon to protect my self and family and friends
Kalie Parkes
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Make sure you proof read your writing as you have not used enough punctuation Kalie! What other punctuation could you have used here as well as full stops?
Mr. Berry
The first sentence is very long maybe you could have shortened it a little bit.
This needs full stops.
Charlie K
I like it but what would you use as defence?
Sally Kerr
I would use a dagger or a sword or any weapon to protect my self and family and friends
Kalie Parkes