We enjoyed your recount of your trip. You used great sentences with full stops, finger spaces and used exclamation marks. We wanted to find out if your journey was a long one and why would you like to go back there? How did you feel when you got there and stepped into the story of how to catch a star?
Hello Koala’s
Our journey was a long journey because we had a long walk to the station. We liked the train ride because we played I spy. Elephants would love to go back and go inside another book. We felt excited when we went inside the book?
Did you go inside the same book as us?
From Elephants
Sounds like an interesting school trip Elephants
Kiera King Paris class
I like you have recaps when you went to the discovery world.
By Harley macpherson
We enjoyed your recount of your trip. You used great sentences with full stops, finger spaces and used exclamation marks. We wanted to find out if your journey was a long one and why would you like to go back there? How did you feel when you got there and stepped into the story of how to catch a star?
Koalas
We like how you have used lots of time words.
We like how you have used an exclamation mark.
We like how you have used capital letters.
Next time read your work twice to check it makes sense.
From Hippo Class 🙂
Hello Koala’s
Our journey was a long journey because we had a long walk to the station. We liked the train ride because we played I spy. Elephants would love to go back and go inside another book. We felt excited when we went inside the book?
Did you go inside the same book as us?
From Elephants
I hope you had lots of fun my brother jimmy told me all about it also did you find the star from ronnie