This is really intresting from Emma and christopher
This is good Leon maybe you can check your spellings and remember a new line for a new speaker.
Leon some good adjectives you used.I really enjoyed it,keep doing work like this.By Maisha
This is exciting, I really enjoyed reading it. I like your use of dialogue. Your story has a more uplifting ending than some. I don’t understand your final sentence though, it doesn’t make sense! Keep up the blogging, well done, Mrs Coop
PRETTY GOOD LEON.YOU COULD ADD MORE DISCRIPTION ON THE FACTORY. DENIS ;]
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This is really intresting from Emma and christopher
This is good Leon maybe you can check your spellings and remember a new line for a new speaker.
Leon some good adjectives you used.I really enjoyed it,keep doing work like this.By Maisha
This is exciting, I really enjoyed reading it. I like your use of dialogue. Your story has a more uplifting ending than some. I don’t understand your final sentence though, it doesn’t make sense!
Keep up the blogging, well done, Mrs Coop
PRETTY GOOD LEON.YOU COULD ADD MORE DISCRIPTION ON THE FACTORY. DENIS ;]