Well done Charlie, I like your character ideas. can you tell me more about how Leonardo looked, eg what did his eyes look like? One of your sentences is not complete- when suddenly his least favourite brother…(did what?) You need a verb here. Mrs Coop
Charlie you could use some more descriptive words to make it more interesting.You can use more adjectives to describe your character.keep it up and always keep your idea,super. super. by Maisha
Well done Charlie, I like your character ideas. can you tell me more about how Leonardo looked, eg what did his eyes look like? One of your sentences is not complete- when suddenly his least favourite brother…(did what?) You need a verb here. Mrs Coop
Charlie you could use some more descriptive words to make it more interesting.You can use more adjectives to describe your character.keep it up and always keep your idea,super. super. by Maisha