The missing purse.

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4 Responses to The missing purse.

  1. shehh says:

    I love it you just forgot to set the scene and it is a bit like a play script.

  2. davie says:

    very good vocabulary but maybe add more connectives

  3. danqn says:

    I like this story because I always wanted Stig to meet Barney’s family. I love the part where Barney said that Stig should dress in proper clothes. Remember to add some missing punctuation and check the spelling of Lou.

  4. majeed says:

    Vicky this is really good, I like the way that you have described the robbers. But you could try to add a bit more information.
    Yumna

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