This is really good, I like how you have used facinating adjectives and verbs. However you have missed out a few letters and commas, like: qestions and qeations also doen. Remember to check through your work, to see if you have made any mistakes. The amount of times you keep using the same words should be looked back on as well. Anyways, on the whole it is an amazing piece of writing and I hope you can edit and improve your writing so it can be to it’s BEST.
it was really good from Callum
This is a very good no amazing story but.. you could of checked a few mistakes.
This is really good, I like how you have used facinating adjectives and verbs. However you have missed out a few letters and commas, like: qestions and qeations also doen. Remember to check through your work, to see if you have made any mistakes. The amount of times you keep using the same words should be looked back on as well. Anyways, on the whole it is an amazing piece of writing and I hope you can edit and improve your writing so it can be to it’s BEST.
Yumna
very good description Emma i like the way you used different word choices:)
You need to check your work because there are some mistakes.
WHOA! That is soon good emma i think you give it a little check through though 😉
– Rosie 😀