the robot and the butterfly

5 Responses to the robot and the butterfly

1. kendp says:

   February 23, 2015 at 11:04 am

   I like the use of vocabulary and the onamatopaeia but you could add some more detail in the paragraphs
   By Paige 🙂
2. revev says:

   February 23, 2015 at 11:08 am

   Star: Good vocabulary
   Star:Adjectives
   Wish:Capital letters
3. young says:

   February 23, 2015 at 11:08 am

   I like your use of words and vocabulary but you can use more informatoin and description
4. shott says:

   February 23, 2015 at 11:11 am

   I like the use of your elipises but you could add a full stop before the end of speech by Ronnie
5. awells says:

   February 27, 2015 at 11:22 am

   Lovely use of description, Alfie! Now try to check you have added all the appropriate punctuation. Keep writing! Mrs Wells

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