Revenge

6 Responses to Revenge

1. revev says:

   February 23, 2015 at 10:58 am

   I didn’t mean I’m I meant on.
2. shott says:

   February 23, 2015 at 11:07 am

   I like the introduction it has explained the story very well

   I like the way you used lots of vocabulary in your writing

   I like the story but it would be better if you added more adverbs
3. huset says:

   February 23, 2015 at 11:07 am

   Vicky I think you story was really good with lots of sentence openers,but you could have checked through and edit it to put your capital letters in.
4. roget says:

   February 26, 2015 at 8:06 pm

   Vicky I love your description you have used love the word vocabulary
5. awells says:

   February 27, 2015 at 11:14 am

   Lovely! A very dramatic piece. I love the short sentences and the cliffhanger. Try to use ‘softer’ words to describe his mother. Keep writing! Mrs Wells
6. taylg says:

   March 12, 2015 at 3:01 pm

   I like the vocabulary that you use in your piece. Gabrielle

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