It a good story but use more questions and also word vocabulary is really cool so please keep writing more blog like this because this is an excellent piece of writing.
Yumna. This is a brilliant piece of writing, full of description. I love the tension you build in! You could try to give us more information about the robot’s past! Keep writing! Mrs Wells
Yummna I think that you have a lot of amazing adjectives,you have excelent punctuation but I wish you told us why the robot hates humans.
That was amazing! You used good verbs and it’s very detailed but you could use some speech.
It a good story but use more questions and also word vocabulary is really cool so please keep writing more blog like this because this is an excellent piece of writing.
Very good piece of writing but there’s spelling mistakes like somethin and hared the correct spellings are here something and hated. Leon
Yumna. This is a brilliant piece of writing, full of description. I love the tension you build in! You could try to give us more information about the robot’s past! Keep writing! Mrs Wells
i think you did very well and you can do nothing else to make it better.
i like your your work.by chelsea
I love your work by amelia tattam in london class