Some really effective vocabulary used, Yumna. Remember to read it through, does it all make sense? Mrs Wells
Thank you Mrs Wells for giving good feedback. Hopefully my next piece will be better.
Yumna
It was very misterious and scary. Richard
Yumna it should make sense but you could of used some more adjectives and read it through.you could use some similes. Maisha
good powerful adjectives. hope to see more interesting stories from you soon.
very good Yumna I liked all the adjectives it amazed me when I looked at the first sentence just read it through carefully
Mrs Wells, I have missed out a letter from the word streaked but I had written steaked.
good piece of work I love how you adjectives.
Good piece of work and nice powerful adjective.
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Some really effective vocabulary used, Yumna. Remember to read it through, does it all make sense? Mrs Wells
Thank you Mrs Wells for giving good feedback. Hopefully my next piece will be better.
Yumna
It was very misterious and scary. Richard
Yumna it should make sense but you could of used some more adjectives and read it through.you could use some similes. Maisha
good powerful adjectives. hope to see more interesting stories from you soon.
very good Yumna I liked all the adjectives it amazed me when I looked at the first sentence just read it through carefully
Mrs Wells, I have missed out a letter from the word streaked but I had written steaked.
good piece of work I love how you adjectives.
Good piece of work and nice powerful adjective.