I like the way you have used the senses to help with your description. I would like to know what Vincent looks like though- you forgot to describe him!
I think he should go exploring next, and find something interesting. Mrs Coop
I liked the bit where Vincent woke up and smelt the most revolting smell of blood! I think he could calm the birds down by giving them some worms!
by charlie in madrid
Good metaphors Callum .by tommy
I like the way you have used the senses to help with your description. I would like to know what Vincent looks like though- you forgot to describe him!
I think he should go exploring next, and find something interesting. Mrs Coop
I liked the bit where Vincent woke up and smelt the most revolting smell of blood! I think he could calm the birds down by giving them some worms!
by charlie in madrid